This report aims to... "Compared with the IGadget mp3 player, most of the iGadget mp3 player users favor its design" - try to avoid reptation in this sentence. Grammar of satisfy errors headphone quality - iGadget users also dissatisfied - so using Korea as a good example does not work. Generally good as far as you have written.
Report of H&F MP3 1. Introduction
1.1 Background
In the industry of MP3 player, the major competitor of H&F mp3 is iGadget mp3 player. Nowadays there is an increasing trend for consumers towards using iGadget, resulting in a keen competition faced by H&F. On the other hand, according to a recent survey, it is found that the performance of H&F mp3 players is not satisfied in several aspects.
1.2 Purpose
In this report,it aims to indicate the weaknesses of H&F mp3 player by comparing with the performance of iGadget mp3 player, followed by some practical recommendations.
1.3 Outline
An overall performance analysis will be first presented. Then the weaknesses of H&F mp3 player will be examined in different aspects respectively. Following such findings, conclusions are drawn and a number of recommendations are made.
2. Findings
2.1 Overall Performance
According to attachment 1, totally six aspects are included in this survey to evaluate the overall performance of both H&F mp3 player and iGadget mp3 player. It is found that just over half of the H&F mp3 users are satisfied with the overall performance of H&F mp3 player while about six out of ten of iGadget users are satisfied with the performance of iGadget mp3 player. Users of H&F mp3 player are satisfied by the sound quality and battery life while the design, function and headphone quality cannot meet customers' expectation.
2.2 Design
Under half of the H&F mp3 users appreciate the design of the mp3 player. Compared with the IGadget mp3 player, most of the iGadget mp3 player users favor its design. The unpopularity of H&F mp3 player is resulted from the size and the color options. The size of the mp3 player is too bulky and inconvenient to bring along. Besides, only black and white versions are available for customers to choose.These imply that the mp3 player is not user friendly and attractive enough.
2.3 Function
Approximately fewer than two-fifths of H&F mp3 player users dissatisfy the functions of the mp3 player, while about two-thirds of iGadget mp3 player users are pleased by its design. Compare with iGadget mp3 player, H&F mp3 player is not as user friendly as iGadget mp3 player. This is because H&F mp3 player requires a specific software program which must be installed on the user's computer to transfer the music files onto it; but this is not the case for iGadget mp3 player.
2.4 Headphone Quality
In terms of headphone quality, less than a third of H&F users are satisfied. It results from the immature technology of production and the quality control system in Malaysia. Eventually, the reputation of H&F are deteriorated. However, four out of ten of the users of iGadget are satisfied since the products are made in Korea where is fraught with mature technology.
2.5 Market Share
According to attachment 2, there has been a gradual decline in the market share of H&F mp3 player. This is because the celebrity spokesperson is not attractive enough 3. Conclusion
This report aims to...
"Compared with the IGadget mp3 player, most of the iGadget mp3 player users favor its design" - try to avoid reptation in this sentence.
Grammar of satisfy errors
headphone quality - iGadget users also dissatisfied - so using Korea as a good example does not work.
Generally good as far as you have written.
Report of H&F MP3
1. Introduction
1.1 Background
In the industry of MP3 player, the major competitor of H&F mp3 is iGadget mp3 player. Nowadays there is an increasing trend for consumers towards using iGadget, resulting in a keen competition faced by H&F. On the other hand, according to a recent survey, it is found that the performance of H&F mp3 players is not satisfied in several aspects.
1.2 Purpose
In this report,it aims to indicate the weaknesses of H&F mp3 player by comparing with the performance of iGadget mp3 player, followed by some practical recommendations.
1.3 Outline
An overall performance analysis will be first presented. Then the weaknesses of H&F mp3 player will be examined in different aspects respectively. Following such findings, conclusions are drawn and a number of recommendations are made.
2. Findings
2.1 Overall Performance
According to attachment 1, totally six aspects are included in this survey to evaluate the overall performance of both H&F mp3 player and iGadget mp3 player. It is found that just over half of the H&F mp3 users are satisfied with the overall performance of H&F mp3 player while about six out of ten of iGadget users are satisfied with the performance of iGadget mp3 player. Users of H&F mp3 player are satisfied by the sound quality and battery life while the design, function and headphone quality cannot meet customers' expectation.
2.2 Design
Under half of the H&F mp3 users appreciate the design of the mp3 player. Compared with the IGadget mp3 player, most of the iGadget mp3 player users favor its design. The unpopularity of H&F mp3 player is resulted from the size and the color options. The size of the mp3 player is too bulky and inconvenient to bring along. Besides, only black and white versions are available for customers to choose.These imply that the mp3 player is not user friendly and attractive enough.
2.3 Function
Approximately fewer than two-fifths of H&F mp3 player users dissatisfy the functions of the mp3 player, while about two-thirds of iGadget mp3 player users are pleased by its design. Compare with iGadget mp3 player, H&F mp3 player is not as user friendly as iGadget mp3 player. This is because H&F mp3 player requires a specific software program which must be installed on the user's computer to transfer the music files onto it; but this is not the case for iGadget mp3 player.
2.4 Headphone Quality
In terms of headphone quality, less than a third of H&F users are satisfied. It results from the immature technology of production and the quality control system in Malaysia. Eventually, the reputation of H&F are deteriorated. However, four out of ten of the users of iGadget are satisfied since the products are made in Korea where is fraught with mature technology.
2.5 Market Share
According to attachment 2, there has been a gradual decline in the market share of H&F mp3 player. This is because the celebrity spokesperson is not attractive enough
3. Conclusion
4. Recommendation